From 1b2fb772c25f1713e51f7e54b5c1d07b12f8c771 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: "luxagraf@d84aab57-1f5e-0410-8062-aca21c2a36dd" Date: Tue, 16 Dec 2008 01:06:31 +0000 Subject: added old notes folder with misc cuts, notes and sketches --- old notes/new notes.txt | 43 +++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ 1 file changed, 43 insertions(+) create mode 100644 old notes/new notes.txt (limited to 'old notes/new notes.txt') diff --git a/old notes/new notes.txt b/old notes/new notes.txt new file mode 100644 index 0000000..ea4d49d --- /dev/null +++ b/old notes/new notes.txt @@ -0,0 +1,43 @@ +new notes + +combine scene at the bar with scene in the club. +chapter with cards, going out and strip club??? the strip club as an aquarium darkness the gyrating fish and +ends with remencence about Maya... + + +* * * * +Next chapter is Dean taping the window like the cockroach over the music + +DeanŐs departure late at night. He come by knocking on the window imitation of the cockroach clicking. He disappears back into the woods and I pick him up to take him to his car. +then he is gone and fairly quickly we leave for new york + +* * * * +then one chapter to get rid of Chloe and Jimmy. Put Dean on the plane and move in with Maya. start letters to Chloe (prior to use the piece where Maya stops writing) + +* * * * +fix beginning so that scratch has the truck and sil doesn't and fix the barbeque scene so that Sil is excited by the prospect of the driving scratch's truck back to the house and possibly use that as an opportunity to bring up a brief comparison between the falcon engine and the truck engine. + +all goes to hell chapter about Ty. there is something familiar about him... I know him from LA!!! +or use the original set up in chapter five... + +use LA section for Sil wandering Brooklyn + +* * * * + +Chloe and Jimmy come to retrieve him (first snow) +* * * * +Chapter at the cabin incident with the eyebrow coming back and Jimmy and Scratch leaving, +scratch gives Sil the truck, Chloe and I on the train car falling back into the soybeans and staring up at the stars. + +Afterword: +starts with the deer at the window. then in Moab the deer gather around Sil +letter to Chloe and Sil in Moab. +letter idea of laura's.... +you can not change how you feel you can only change how you act + +and further how are those two related can a change of action bring about a change of feeling. + + +scene with Sil and deer as a departure scene. the divinity of the deer. sil's spirit guide. link that to s scene in moab where the deer gather around him by the river???? + + -- cgit v1.2.3-70-g09d2