notes for tomorrow is the desert dean is arriving on his birthday... normalize chapter five toward the end and then have chapter six begin with the party, the bonfire scene but extended, perhaps even have The Professor be there as a new character as well. Though he sits in the corner and doesn't say much. He and Chloe exchange longing looks and whatnot. He talks to Scratch. Chloe and Dean flirt, Professor gets mad. have Scratch tell the thump story. End with dean and I walking down the road that we will later have to run from the cops on. jimmy and Dean talk about the pills introduce the idea that Dean wants them, needs to self medicate which can carry over into his conversation with Sil. Chapter Seven is the bar scene with Professor and Chloe and Dean and Scratch and Jimmy. Also use the bartender whatever name he had have dialogue that sets up some sort of Jimmy and Dean plan to get more pills and make money off them. Chapter eight is the incident that propels everything to new york. The pills and the breakup of chloe and The Professor. NYC chapters: Everyone at Dean's place. Then Just Maya and I. Then Dean and I. then the letter from Scratch announcing his and Jimmy's plan to ride motorcycles to Costa Rica. Then Dean leaves And i take the bus back to Athens. New Years Eve and everything out at the cabin. The eyebrow comes back and Jimmy and Scratch leave. then it's down to Chloe and I. then i head off to Utah and write the final letter to Chloe. Tie horses and horse head nebula to the get behind the mule every morning and plow. ÒGod is a place you will wait for the rest of your life.Ó tie that to the fact that he was a chef and then the card game he already hosts in hotel rooms. He owns several properties. He started by back when RRS was but an itch. Scratch is so old school he owns the building that (holds the deed) the school is in. Scratch as thakÉ. Plaques on the streetÉ 1918 women enter UGA have Chloe point that out in the midst of someone whistling at her from a car. Maybe just dean and Sil go to new york and then everything goes bad earilier and Dean gets packed off the Costa Rica and Jimmy and Chloe retrieve Sil? Or jimmy and Chloe show up to get JimmyÕs money? Or the original plan Dean splits and then Sil Chloe and Jimmy go up together to get the money? CouldnÕt he just send the money? Of course with the drive the falcon could have its conversationÉ. Possiblity of ending with a the beginning of a letter to chloe have the eyebrow come back earlier possibly in the scene at the cabin. Letter to chloe starts with the idea that there are an infinite number of possibilities between one and zeroÉ 0 sideways eight 1. eyebrow comes back at the cabin followed by a discussion of its gone to one the implications of one and zero on and off Sil is dogmatic Chloe is skeptical. Letter is return addressed from mexico city. The pouch in ch 3 comes up again in the new york section with dylans teeth Grand central station/peen station confessional. Dean takes me there after thing with Judah and Ashley. Sound echoes from corner to corner along the arch. Old man from the subway is sitting in a pille of clothes and junk and answers back. walks characterÕs motions in general find a pool of verbs for each character so that the descriptions become distinctive Scratch is the most highly developed character in terms of how much you get to see with them the stuff with jimmy and chloe needs to be more vivid in their mannerisms. Expand the dialogue scenes at the beginning (with jimmy in the falcon use the falcon as talking it is the centerpiece of its own converstion) There is an imbalance between the abstract spurts of ideas and in scenes and that kind of disorder and the dialogue needs to work harder (word choice, subject matter) the dialogue doesnÕt hold weight next to the beauty of the abstractions Ty is the first episode of real bloody nose revelation of emotion. And after that hook up with chloe. The fact that he has more passion in the scene with Judah than he does in MayaÕs relationship should say something or means something. First section ends with Dean and the cops. Second sec tion dean has JimmyÕs money sil wants to see Maya and chloe is along for the ride. All the new york stuff rearranged to fit style and tone. Ends with scene with judah. Section three God is a Place you will wait for the rest of your life, begins on the drive through jersey.l scene in hotel with chloe. And then either silk is depressed because he realizes he was in love with a construct of his imagination and regular solo ending occurs OR ending with chloe (first Scratch and Jimmy depart for south america.) driving through the sunset in it as a counterpoint to the you canÕt drive through a rainbow. There is a tangible mist of glowing orange. The marquee clouds are luminous and huge. Orange beams of light refracting by the carÉ blends with the orange grass at the base of the trees the sky is doing its jesus thing again the sky is doing its jesus thing again when Sil returns possibly Chloe and Jimmy and I go up againÉ. In my visions I drink myself to sleep at night in a cobblestone alleys behind barsÉ perhaps jimmy and I will go down to the cabin and brew moonshine everyone will come out for christmas dinner and talk philosophically and be tender and understanding. Cnn ticker idea in the bar scene possibly in NYC Book cover story that chloe tells as a metaphor for postmodernism, tied to we all fit together bit Okay. This is a few years in the future. ItÕs a time when babyÕs suckle electrical outlets for engineered milk and that sort of Wired future, a future that only designers really hope for. Stan was book cover. He printed before there was any book for him the cover, he was the product of advanced marketing schemes of the Stogies, but of course he remained blissfully unaware of this tidbit of insight regarding his origins. He only knew that he always felt a lack of inner content if you will. Too alegorical. Ya I canÕt see where youÕre going to go with this that we arenÕt already gettiing to before you? Is there going to be an unexpected plot twist, because even that is kind of clichŽ. The only possible ending youÕve got are he finds a book or he doesnÕt find a book both of which are tired and played to death on the Lifetime Channel and its ilk. Just like men. Seeing only the options that you expect or that you believe are possible. Suppose Stan wake up one day and is no longer a book cover? Perhaps that observation of his was mistaken, perhaps he is in fact a book? The medium is the message you mean? No a cover is not a medium James. You were wrong when you said evedrything is going to be all right Dean: he knew it was going to haoppen Of course. DoesnÕt make it any easier YouÕre a sick man perhaps What do you want out of a relationship Something that isnÕt a foregone conclusion Married to mapped on back of truck A chorus of deranged voices sqeaking together, not unlike Alvin and company after theyÕve tied a few on at the a local watering hole D: Is he one of these old school Athens crusties I see in the corners of bars? J: Naw man, Scratch is way beyond that. He owns the deed to the building the old school cats attended. He put in the desks, bolted them down and stuck gum to the bottoms of em. He carved his inititials and nailed down the girls pigtails before the so-called old school kids got off the teet. Man all those people think RRS is old school, shit Scratch owned the club he first played in. he had restraunts in Atlanta and new your before those cats could have solid food. No man heÕs the real fuckind deal. Bring Judah back from Spain after arrival in NYC. Millions now living will never die: fantasies or death, where will you be when the moment comes? Subway platformÉ hearattack in crowd, mistake for performance art. Belch of flame from the car you just cut off, the infitismal second between recognition and a car all skittering. Tie mead to chapter 12 lengthen cabin section to include brewing moonshine. ÒMead? No more goddamn mead, what are you so bushy eyed hippie? This is the south mutherfucker we drink moonshine. Mead. Hmmph. Mead is the past my friend. a romantic nostalgia for the past. Crap. Moonshine is the present. With bite.Ó Lengthen out so that nothing happens on new years eve. Ie no downtown move that forward a weak or two and have moonshine be the impetus. I go the meet them at a party but pass out in the train. Go to LA for Christmas observations of my parents buying things simply for the sake of giving them, going through the motions because it is what is expected. Buying DVDÕs for each other when they donÕt even have a DVD player, either they are very patient with their gifts or they simply donÕt care. Token gestures necessary to feel part of a consumer society. They insist on giving me things when in fact I want less not more. I am trying to fit everything I need in one bag. One small bag. I am joining the circus, I am going on tour. I am going out for the papers. For cigarettes. For no reason at all.(the whole deserted fifties tv set appears of my parents lifeÉ the perversion of what families should have been the tv is off etc perhaps a scene with Ashley at Alta Coffee. Potential for some word play/metaphore with ÒAltaÓ Add two chapters about New York. Transfer Dean to Brooklyn. And give him a bigger role in new yorkÑa kind of refuge that turns out to not be a refuge Perhaps use some of the concrete stuff for the new york section Tie drive to new york, or possible train ride to the fantasy episode about driving and the road disappearing and being in a mezazoic world Scatter your pearly seed where ever the swine takes root Millions now living will never die: fantasies or death, where will you be when the moment comes? Subway platformÉ hearattack in crowd, mistake for performance art. Belch of flame from the car you just cut off, the infitismal second between recognition and a car all skittering. American Aquarium drinker: Bill living in the aquarium darkness of his Brooklyn flat with whats her name. Trying to drink it all in because I was nostalgic for it even as it was happening, it had the preternatural feeling of history of a fond memory being made and the value of the experience was not the act itself but looking forward to the memory of it. And what about that point at which memory ceases? Drank all the fish everything is gone It would take all day to explain it: Notes for Fall: C4?5? chapter 6 add conversation with scratch at bar. fix smooth breasts; add street designations and description of walk to meet maya at the lounge rather than empty breakÉ; Add to section about DeanÕs letter: I sit by the window all day receiving and dispatching cryptic telegrams. A monumental structure begins to take shape. I have nearly constructed the sponge that will absorb everything, the sponge that will erase the world and scrub it free of vermin and lice. Vermin and lice seemingly determined to slurp the last drop of vitality out of mankind and leave the twenty-first century a wasteland sinking into a quagmire of steaming shit. Soon this small southern town will be gone, it will be absorbed into infinity and we will stand on the skeletal shores of napalm seas and light our cigarettes with simmering coals that line the charcoal beach. I told her about the view from JudahÕs place and she wanted to see her own. It was early spring, warm though. We brought a blanket up and lay on our backs looking at the stars. The spaces between the stars arenÕt dark. Maya said. ItÕs a void, but itÕs pure white light, thatÕs where life started, in bright pure nothingness. The space. And then tiptoeing past the superÕs door and back to our shoebox where we lived like old women on breadcrumbs and exquisite rich-daddy wine. My leg is ringing and I canÕt answer it. No oneÕs home right now and my leg is ringing. Was that you I photographed topless and not because I wanted to prove we had been there or in anticipation of nostalgic moments to come. A visual two-step through time, like you want your memories to be, swaying a bit, jiggled, head on your shoulder, refridgerator eyes preserving, yours too, but mine. Mine helped along by that photograph of you that I took. Or didnÕt. ÒWhy are you wet?Ó ÒHad a squirt gun fight with myself.Ó ÒDid you win?Ó ÒIts hard to say.Ó ÒYa.Ó ItÕs late evening by the time the phone rings. I wasnÕt expecting a call. ÒSil,Ó Dean is screaming. ÒGet out of the house. Take your car and meet me about five miles down the road.Ó Dean rarely lies to me. Or causes unnecessary anxiety. I hang up, grab my keys and pull down the driveway. As I come to the end of the dirt road and roll onto concrete I see them. They are all in a row, evenly spaced, geometric and sinister. Inside I can see the close-cropped flattops and angular jawbones. Their mirrored sunglasses craningÑlooking for addresses. Their arenÕt any for our cottages, which means theyÕll go all the way to the end and then come back. This will allow me to slip out behind them. There are five of them. Cruising in smart formation. The trunks are emblazoned with metallic nameplates that read: Interceptor. I wave to them in a friendly southern manner. Blockish heads ignore me. I hang a left and head out to the main road. Five cops clearly seeking Dean. This is bad. I go about a mile a spot dean jogging awkwardly along the uneven bottom of drainage ditch. I open the rear door and he dives in with the car still rolling. He stays lying down in the back seat. I hear a muttering of thanks between his gasps of air. ÒWhere should I be going?Ó ÒMexico.Ó ÒWhy?Ó ÒI ran from the cops.Ó ÒNoticed that.Ó ÒAnd IÕm out of cigarettes.Ó ÒHere.Ó ÒThanks. Do you have any Johnny Cash in here?Ó ÒNo stereo.Ó ÒShit. IÕd really like to hear Johnny Cash.Ó Add judah to a scene with Dean where he talks about running into him in new york. He tells about the roof which leads to this remineses from silÉ After Chloe and jimmy leave new york Sil begins writing to Chloe back and forth which leads then to come and retrieve him and then the scene where the car breaks down and she leads him into the kudz and they climb up on the train car full of sybeans and kiss. Then she pushes me in and i lie there looking up at her. then a jump forward in time to Utah.